Friday, December 9, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday #3

I’m grateful for this week’s Flash Fiction Friday photo challenge.  My other writing has been too somber and serious and introspective of late.  I enjoyed writing something silly and funny for a change – which is truer to my nature.  I ultimately have an enormous and not so slightly warped sense of humor.  Someday I might write a longer piece just for laughs.  In the meantime, here’s a little light-hearted humor in my third installment of Flash Fiction.
Photo courtesy of Madison Woods

Memaw hung up the phone and put on her pinched face.  Uncle Darryl was coming for a visit.  He was her little brother - not that she wanted to claim him most times.  He was a bit “touched” as Papaw would say.  We kids, on the other hand, loved his curious ways.  While the calendar put him at 26, the emptiness in his head made him a child.  Last time, we played hide-and-go-seek all day before he almost burned down the barn.  This time we would find better games and hope Memaw put the matches and kerosene high and away.   

12 comments:

  1. So no cooking bacon on the space heater then? Lol Fun story! :)

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  2. I think that's how he set the barn on fire...haha.

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  3. Dear Susan,

    '...high and away." Loved this expression. It helped to seal the canvas you painted perfectly. Nice story and good use of the photo.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  4. Haha, great voice. The playfulness is just perfect. Thanks for writing!

    Here's mine: http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2011/12/09/look-200/

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  5. Dear Doug,

    Thank you. I like the ring/tone of "high and away" too...probably my favorite and most fitting words in the whole paragraph. I'm glad you agree.

    Susan

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  6. @thecolorlime Thank you. I imagine she is a young girl - maybe 12-13...maybe during the early 50's. I think she is the oldest of 5 or 6 siblings, lives in a rural area and loves to read...

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  7. Siobhan's comment made me laugh out loud. The fire hazard was my first real-life response to seeing what he was doing.

    Loved your story Susan and I sure hope memaw puts the matches 'high and away'...but I'll bet the kid has other means of rabble-rousing ;)

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  8. I really loved the descriptions and choice of words in your story - Memaw, pinched, 'touched', 'high and away'- to name a few. Really loved the downhome feel. Great job!

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  9. @Madison ~thank you for reading and for such a fun photo. The fire danger is what got me thinking too. I like this flash format. It's quite freeing (ps - kids *will* find any way possible to get into trouble, won't they?)

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  10. @Mahjira ~ thank you - "downhome" - that is what I was going for. Or, at least the way the story seemed to flow

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  11. The names are priceless! I love how you got so much from the prompt. We all would love to have an Uncle Darryl. He sounds like an entertaining guy!

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  12. Thanks, Susie. I had fun writing this week...

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