Friday, January 20, 2012

Flash Fiction Friday #7


The museum, from the grandeur of the architecture to the collections of brilliant artwork, was my vision of nirvana. Perfect – less the throngs of gabby, babbling self-appointed art aficionados. The profound communiqué of the masters would never be heard by these.
I was engaged in a wordless tête-à-tête with Gauguin’s Te Arii Vahine when I heard yet another imbecile insist, “My third grader can paint better than thaaat!”
My left eye twitched. I ached to argue the precision, the technique, but recognized I needed to be more persuasive.  I aimed low to avoid spattering her viscera on Femmes de Tahiti.

27 comments:

  1. Wonderful! My eye twitched too!

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    1. I have been looking forward to seeing Gauguin and Polynesia: An Elusive Paradise. It opens at the Seattle Art Museum on February 9...then I saw the photo prompt. PS - I'm usually the babbling self-appointed art aficionado...haha. Thank you for reading!

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  2. Wonderful, Susan! I loved the imagery of the eye twitch and the use of words such as tete-a-tete, nirvana, spattering. Perfect!

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    1. Thank you. I agonized over each word this week. Too much going on in my mind for it to flow freely.

      ~Susan

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  3. What a visceral little story. I guess art lovers can be just as passionate and twisted as writers. You have the only one I've read set in a museum. Good setting. Loved the sense of outrage at the ignorant rube. I could really identify. Some great word choices. Enjoyed it very much.
    Here's mine: http://bridges are for burning.wordpress.com/

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    1. I was planning to have my person stay in the museum to enjoy it alone after closing, but then the story took on a mind of its own. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was actually just over reading your work a few moments ago. Great read!

      ~Susan

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  4. The irony of beautiful violence in the context of art is striking. Thank you for sharing your words!

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    1. And, thank you for reading. It's a wonder that the two minds - one that appreciates beauty and one that resorts to violence - can exist in the same person.

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  5. I loved it! A new museum just opened in our neighborhood--Crystal Bridges Museum of American Art. It's fabulous, and I can just image the scene you painted coming to live. Great choice of words too.

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    1. Thank you for your kind words. That's one thing I miss about not living near D.C. anymore - the museums!

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  6. Very well done! Loved this. And full disclosure: I may have made a comment or two like that about certain paintings! Sorry. ;) read mine at http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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    1. Oh...I do to...all the time! I took my daughters to one of the Smithsonian art museums and we were the ones commenting...like I told them, art is in the eye of the beholder.

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  7. Liked the piece, Susan. I'll start following your blog too. As for the "words in a hat" trick, it's similar to generating a series of words via type but in this case they're jotted on little slips of paper for when writers meet for real (not virtual). See you soon!

    Joe Lerner
    http://furiousfictions.com

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    1. That does sound interesting. One never knows where inspiration might come from. Thank you for following my blog. I'll go check out your work...

      ~Susan

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    2. Oh wait...I did read yours this morning!

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  8. writingbothsides.comJanuary 20, 2012 at 5:58 PM

    Totally different and original choice of subjects. Well written.

    Here's mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8y

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    1. Thank you for reading. I look forward to seeing what you wrote as well.

      ~Susan

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  9. ...and, with any luck, the splatter will be mistaken for just another work of art - or maybe it really is. ;)

    Here's my story: http://wp.me/p24aJS-1P

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    1. Brings new meaning to the dark arts...

      I'm off to read your work!

      ~Susan

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  10. Vicious! Yes, it could drive one mad, the leaping to judgement commentaries of people who have not invested anything into the understanding of art. I have certainly had the same feeling, as I'm sure many of us have. Of course, to act on it is the descent into lunacy, giving your story that sublime twist. I wonder if the splattering of the viscera could be a bit of Damien Hirst-style performance art itself?

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    1. Painting and writing are both artistic forms of expression...some darker than the others...some understood and some not. PS - Hard as I try, I cannot write about puppies and butterflies...I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.

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  11. <3 I have had this feeling more times than I can remember. That someone has captured the feeling so precisely in a drabble has made me very happy.

    Excellent job!

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    1. Thank you! I'll admit I often question the validity of a piece of work...but I try not to spoil anyone else's time appreciating. Like I told my girls, each piece is meaningful to someone or it wouldn't be there.

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  12. Dear Susan,

    One of the best 100 word pieces I've read since I joined the group. Subtle and true, you captured perfectly the urge to violently correct the misapprehensions of the morons of the world. Wonderful last sentence.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Dear Doug,

      Mahalo...thank you again for your encouraging words. Mahalo...

      ~Susan

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  13. This is a great piece!
    The annoyance of the protagonist could be felt. Been through such phases myself! Some people just don't appreciate and can't even disapprove gracefully! I felt for the lead of your story! :)

    I made two entries for this prompt...
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/22/long-hauls/
    and
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/destiny/

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    1. Thank you for reading and approving! I don't always agree with what I see - indeed, modern art sometimes leaves me confused - but I do try to do so "gracefully." I'm glad you enjoyed.
      ~Susan

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