Thursday, February 23, 2012

Flash Fiction #11


The photo prompt this week was so easy, it was hard - for me.  Because of the way I write, I immediately saw monsters, and murderers, and bears.  (Oh my.)  Too many ideas swirled in my head, and they were all far too predictable.  Frustrated, I stepped outside "the box" and wrote something completely different.

As a lover of spicy food and the 2006 Bayou Bugaloo third place pepper eating contest winner, this is what I came up with...a little comedy for you to enjoy.


DING!  DING!  DING!  Justin threw the partially eaten chicken wing onto the heap of tiny bones in front of him and swabbed at the tears streaming from his eyes then blew his nose into the once clean towel.  

A belch rose from the napalm in his gullet and escaped past numb, red-rimmed lips.

Through the buzzing in his ears, he heard his name called.  Cameras flashed as someone handed him the gilded trophy.  2011 Hot Wing Champ! 

“You look like you’re in pain,” said the Star-Times News reporter.

“Not half as bad as I’m going to feel tomorrow,” thought Justin. 


(Remember, you too can play!  See http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/and look for the #FridayFictioneers on Twitter!) 

40 comments:

  1. Hah! I like peppers but, man, I cannot imagine partaking in a pepper eating contest! My admiration for you is boundless. But it must do some damage! Through the entire journey.

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    1. Growing up in the meat and potatoes Midwest, my pepper experience was quite limited. My Thai friend, Ann, widened my horizons...and my need for Pepto. Haha. Seriously, thank you for reading and commenting.

      ~Susan

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  2. LOL. I loved this! I can just imagine how he would feel the next day. Dreadful going in and dreadful coming out! :)

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    1. Thank you...there is not even a glimmer of great literature in this piece..it was pure fun. I'm glad you enjoyed.

      ~Susan

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  3. This truly was a different take on the theme. And boy, he is going to be in some discomfort tomorrow. Serves him right. Good flash, and different.

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    1. Thank you for reading. I had a dreadful time getting started this week. It made my husband laugh, so I posted it.

      ~Susan

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  4. Loved, loved, loved the humor of your piece. I don't do spicey -- I cringed at your descriptions; delishiously, of course. Good job--very inventive!

    Mine: http://vsta.pr/zxAJ1y

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    1. I kid you not. Super spicy affects all of the senses - even the ears...and more. Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm off to read yours!

      ~Susan

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  5. Well you certainly stepped out of the Kentucky Fried box of wings for this one, Susan.
    Pretty clever use of the prompt.
    Yours,
    Lindaura

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    1. Thank you. I wanted to avoid the obvious this week. I never really know where it will go, so I'm glad you liked it!

      ~Susan

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  6. I love spicy food too, but I wouldn't have the nerve to enter a pepper eating contest. I'm very impressed by even a third place finish, but I'm expecting better of you next time. You must have a cast iron stomach lined with teflon. I'm glad you went another direction of this one. It's refreshing.
    Thanks for your insightful words on my effort.
    Blogspot is refusing to recognize my blog. I think it's jealous. So I have to post this as anonymous. Ron Pruitt

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    1. I'm thinking a pepper eating contest is a once in a lifetime event...but, if I ever try again, I will endeavor to do better! haha. I'm a little ticked at blogspot myself right now. It refused to let me edit either of my blogs unless I upgraded to Google Chrome...that's BLACKMAIL!

      ~Susan

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  7. I can empathise with Justin here. Nowadays I can't eat a KFC bargain bucket without my stomach tying itself in knots for days afterwards, and I don't eat them that often and certainly not by myself. But even without the reward of a shiny trophy it is worth it for the visceral thrill of eating meat directly off the bone. You know, I think I'd make an excellent zombie.

    My apologies to any vegetarians who might be reading!

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    1. I have a great picture of me looking quite caveman whilst eating a whole turkey leg. It's a good thing!

      Thank you for reading.

      ~Susan

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  8. Ohhh pooor Justin! Napalm is the WORD.

    Excellent job!

    My link is here: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/let-flow-what-is-left/

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    1. Brings a whole new meaning to "feel the burn"...thank you for reading. I'm off to read yours.

      ~Susan

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  9. Muscular, descriptive language. I perceive your quality. Nice blog, Susan!

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    1. I'm glad you liked it. I feared I was treading the line between descriptive and too many adjectives. Thank you for your kind words.

      ~Susan

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  10. Ha Ha. Loved this. He'll get what we call the "ring of fire."

    Here's mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/02/24/forgotten/

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    1. Yes indeed...poor guy. I'm glad it gave you a laugh.

      ~Susan

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  11. Dear Susan,

    I enjoyed your inventive and out of the ordinary take on the photo prompt this week. This bunch needs some comedy now and then. (And comedy is by no means easy, either. You can call it comedy all you want but if it tanks, comedy it ain't.) Great reward for your risk taking (iin writing and in pepper eating contests!)

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Thank you for reading and commenting, Doug. I just couldn't do the obvious this week. I needed a change of pace. I appreciate your astute perception of my efforts.

      ~Susan

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  12. How creative! I enjoyed this, and feel for the new champion, ow my tummy hurts!

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    1. Thank you! I'm sorry you feel his pain, though. haha

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  13. This is a worthy deviation and commendable...I enjoyed the detailed presentation of events...Would just have to follow you all the way...

    Here is mine:
    http://seewilliams.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/moriah/

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    1. Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comments. I was quite impressed with your offering as well!

      ~Susan

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    1. It's true...owie. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
      ~Susan

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  15. Excellent, Susan! My mouth burned as I read. I love the way you tried to go outside of your comfort zone. That's what I try to do with Madison's photos, too. I usually don't go with the first thing I see. Too easy. Very well done!

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    1. Thank you, Jan. I, too, try to use her photos to expand my creativity.

      ~Susan

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  16. Wow Susan, you captured the feelings of eating too-hot food perfectly. I hope part of the prize is refrigerated toilet roll!

    Here's me: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/friday-fiction-14/

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    1. When we used to dine at my Thai neighbors house, we used to make similar jokes...hahaha. Thanks for reading! I'm off to read yours.

      ~Susan

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  17. Haha! That was a different take. I'm constantly amazed at all the different stories that arise from one single photo. I didn't see anything to suggest in the way of crit, loved it like it was. I do not like such spicy food, but my fiance' will get a kick out of your story. He's Texan and loves the spicy.

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    1. Thanks, Madison! And, thank you for starting this...I'm having the best time. I, too, am amazed at the range of writing styles and story ideas.

      ~Susan

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  18. I loved your literal interpretation of the pile of bones. Fun ending!

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    1. Thank you, Susie. I really felt like I wanted to do something different with the picture...

      ~Susan

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  19. This is a great one -- it's just in a totally different direction that so many of the interpretation's this week, and I really appreciate that new take.

    Also, I'm pretty sure he won't be feeling awesome tomorrow!

    Mine's here if you get a chance to check it out: http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/to-starve-98/

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    1. I'm glad you read and enjoyed my twist on the picture. I had fun with it. (I *know* he'll be feeling it tomorrow...haha) I'm off to read yours.

      ~Susan

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  20. Hehe, hot wings are addictive but to eat in such vast quantities? This was really good fun to read and I especially like the napalm gut. Poor guy. :-)

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    1. Thanks, Andy...I'm glad I could give you a laugh. I'm always up for the challenge each new picture presents...but maybe not the challenge of eating that many hot wings.

      ~Susan

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