Wednesday, May 2, 2012

Flash Fiction #20

#FridayFictioneers is a fun way to express yourself with #100words or less using the weekly photo prompt on Madison’s blog.  Check us out on Facebook too.  In the meantime, here is my 20th installment of Flash Fiction...

 
“My Dearest Rebecca, Although we cannot be together now, please know my heart will forever...”

Someone was coming up the attic stairs.  I jammed the ribbon-tied stack of letters back inside the hole in the wall and scurried over to the cardboard boxes.

It was Mother. 

“How are you coming along with those clothes?” she asked. “Find anything interesting?”

“Interesting?  Why yes, Reeeeebecca.  I sure did,” I thought to myself.

Mother and Father had been married for seventeen years.  Why did she have those letters and who was Damian? 

...and why was the last one postmarked only a week ago?

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31 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 8:09 AM

    cool twist...and turn with time, interactions...I liked what you wrote.

    Here is mine: http://integrativethought.wordpress.com

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:21 PM

      Thank you. I'm on my way to check out yours!

      ~Susan

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  2. Reading PleasureMay 4, 2012 at 8:26 AM

    Mystery and suspense. Great mix. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/fridayfictioneers-lost-without-you/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:29 PM

      Thank you for stopping by and commenting. I'm glad you like it.

      ~Susan

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  3. BlueFuryMay 4, 2012 at 8:46 AM

    Nice twist. Looks like mum's got a few skeletons in her closet...

    Mine's nearly 200 words, and it's this way:
    http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/175/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:32 PM

      Thanks...as a kid I used to hide stuff behind a hole in the wall. It was the first thing I thought about when I saw the photo.

      ~Susan

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  4. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 9:01 AM

    Oh Susan, a nice look into a mystery of life. Made me think of soulmates found, too late, ships passing, missed opportunities, things unrecognised, and honoring promises and vows made to others, and of living in sacrifice.

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:36 PM

      Thank you. I'm glad you got that. After I wrote it, I realized it had a bit of a Bridges of Madison County to it.

      ~Susan

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  5. Sandra CrookMay 4, 2012 at 9:20 AM

    Excellent twist at the end there. Nice one Susan.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/dysfunctional-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:43 PM

      Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm off to read yours.

      ~Susan

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  6. CarlosMay 4, 2012 at 9:25 AM

    Ha! Nice little surprise at the end; well done, Susan.

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 12:49 PM

      Thank you, Carlos...I'm glad you liked it. And...I turned the spam guard off. I wasn't getting spammed, so there was no reason in torturing people.

      ~Susan

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  7. CarlosMay 4, 2012 at 9:26 AM

    By the way, why don't I have to go through that annoying word scramble security thing on your site when I do on all the other Blogger sites?

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  8. T.E.SchoenbornMay 4, 2012 at 10:48 AM

    Oh, great take on the prompt! How original, an affair discovered. I love it.

    Here's mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 1:13 PM

      I'm glad you loved it...it was the first thing that popped into my mind so I rolled with it.

      ~Susan

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  9. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 12:01 PM

    Nicely done. I've read a few that went the route of using the wallpaper as a metaphor for dysfunctional family, but not executed quite this way and with such an interesting, secretive feeling to it. Great!

    -Brian (Mine's over here: http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/04/renovations/)

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 1:32 PM

      Thank you, Brian. I saw a hole in the wall and thought "hiding place"...it's interesting the route each different person took this week.

      ~Susan

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  10. Palooski65May 4, 2012 at 12:52 PM

    Oh, oh--I think Mom got "busted." :-) The daughter's curiosity is neatly shown in your description of furtive reading. Well done.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 1:58 PM

      I think so. What a burden for her child to have...I wonder what she will do.

      ~Susan

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  11. Atiya TownesMay 4, 2012 at 1:05 PM

    Mother is leading a double life. How Soap Opera delicious! Forgive me for going all mushy teenage girl on this. The secret itself is juicy, imaging the kind of love Rebecca and Damian have. It must be something strong indeed, to warrant letters. I want more. Here's mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/fixer-upper-friday-flash-fiction.html Definitely a different kind of mystery all together. Great story.

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 4, 2012 at 1:59 PM

      I'm glad someone loved it enough to go mushy teenager over it! Thank you so much...you made me smile!

      ~Susan

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  12. Linda PalundMay 4, 2012 at 2:42 PM

    Oh I loved it! At first I thought she was Rebecca and hiding the letters from her mom, and then I just thought they were old letters, but finding new love letters is a very nice twist and a quirky take on the prompt.
    Yours as ever,
    Lindaura
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 9, 2012 at 9:49 PM

      Thanks, Linda...I didn't even think people might think the speaker was Rebecca. Now that I read it though...yeah. I'm glad you liked it!

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  13. Douglas MacIlroyMay 4, 2012 at 4:08 PM

    Dear Susan,

    Mothers always know, too. Why else would she have come upstairs?

    What a wonderful story, Susan. Coming of age, mystery, romance and forbidden love all in one hundred words. This was the realtime version of skeletons on the closet. Can't wait to learn more. (Get cracking:)

    Aloha,

    Doug

    P.S. Leaving this bread crumb of a link for your readers. Thank you for visiting my farm. D.

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 9, 2012 at 10:00 PM

      Dear Doug,

      I'm not sure if I could write romance, but I'm glad my few words intrigued you!

      ~Susan

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  14. Amanda GrayMay 5, 2012 at 7:31 AM

    17 years is a long time to hold on to another love. Maybe the marriage was due to an unexpected pregnancy? A story worth exploration.
    Here is mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 9, 2012 at 10:02 PM

      Thank you for stopping by to read, Amanda. I hadn't thought beyond my little story, but that is a good idea!

      ~Susan

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  15. LoraMay 5, 2012 at 12:40 PM

    Whooo...Surprising last line. I'm a sucker when it comes to secrets. I want more. Well done. Here's mine:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 9, 2012 at 10:15 PM

      Thank you for reading and commenting, Lora. I'm headed to read yours - a little late.

      ~Susan

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  16. AnonymousMay 5, 2012 at 1:58 PM

    Yes, who is Damain and why was the last one postmarked just a week ago? I want to know more! Great post!
    My effort is here: http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-friday-fictioneers/

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    1. Susan WenzelMay 9, 2012 at 10:17 PM

      Who is he...yes, that is the great mystery here. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

      ~Susan

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