“My Dearest Rebecca, Although we cannot be together
now, please know my heart will forever...”
Someone was coming up the attic
stairs. I jammed the ribbon-tied stack of letters back inside the hole in
the wall and scurried over to the cardboard boxes.
It was Mother.
“How are you coming along with
those clothes?” she asked. “Find anything interesting?”
“Interesting? Why yes, Reeeeebecca. I sure did,” I thought to myself.
Mother and Father had been
married for seventeen years. Why did she
have those letters and who was Damian?
...and why was the last one postmarked only
a week ago?
cool twist...and turn with time, interactions...I liked what you wrote.
ReplyDeleteHere is mine: http://integrativethought.wordpress.com
Thank you. I'm on my way to check out yours!
Delete~Susan
Mystery and suspense. Great mix. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/fridayfictioneers-lost-without-you/
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by and commenting. I'm glad you like it.
Delete~Susan
Nice twist. Looks like mum's got a few skeletons in her closet...
ReplyDeleteMine's nearly 200 words, and it's this way:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/175/
Thanks...as a kid I used to hide stuff behind a hole in the wall. It was the first thing I thought about when I saw the photo.
Delete~Susan
Oh Susan, a nice look into a mystery of life. Made me think of soulmates found, too late, ships passing, missed opportunities, things unrecognised, and honoring promises and vows made to others, and of living in sacrifice.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
Thank you. I'm glad you got that. After I wrote it, I realized it had a bit of a Bridges of Madison County to it.
Delete~Susan
Excellent twist at the end there. Nice one Susan.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm off to read yours.
Delete~Susan
Ha! Nice little surprise at the end; well done, Susan.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Carlos...I'm glad you liked it. And...I turned the spam guard off. I wasn't getting spammed, so there was no reason in torturing people.
Delete~Susan
By the way, why don't I have to go through that annoying word scramble security thing on your site when I do on all the other Blogger sites?
ReplyDeleteOh, great take on the prompt! How original, an affair discovered. I love it.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/
I'm glad you loved it...it was the first thing that popped into my mind so I rolled with it.
Delete~Susan
Nicely done. I've read a few that went the route of using the wallpaper as a metaphor for dysfunctional family, but not executed quite this way and with such an interesting, secretive feeling to it. Great!
ReplyDelete-Brian (Mine's over here: http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/04/renovations/)
Thank you, Brian. I saw a hole in the wall and thought "hiding place"...it's interesting the route each different person took this week.
Delete~Susan
Oh, oh--I think Mom got "busted." :-) The daughter's curiosity is neatly shown in your description of furtive reading. Well done.
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I think so. What a burden for her child to have...I wonder what she will do.
Delete~Susan
Mother is leading a double life. How Soap Opera delicious! Forgive me for going all mushy teenage girl on this. The secret itself is juicy, imaging the kind of love Rebecca and Damian have. It must be something strong indeed, to warrant letters. I want more. Here's mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/fixer-upper-friday-flash-fiction.html Definitely a different kind of mystery all together. Great story.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad someone loved it enough to go mushy teenager over it! Thank you so much...you made me smile!
Delete~Susan
Oh I loved it! At first I thought she was Rebecca and hiding the letters from her mom, and then I just thought they were old letters, but finding new love letters is a very nice twist and a quirky take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteYours as ever,
Lindaura
http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com
Thanks, Linda...I didn't even think people might think the speaker was Rebecca. Now that I read it though...yeah. I'm glad you liked it!
DeleteDear Susan,
ReplyDeleteMothers always know, too. Why else would she have come upstairs?
What a wonderful story, Susan. Coming of age, mystery, romance and forbidden love all in one hundred words. This was the realtime version of skeletons on the closet. Can't wait to learn more. (Get cracking:)
Aloha,
Doug
P.S. Leaving this bread crumb of a link for your readers. Thank you for visiting my farm. D.
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/
Dear Doug,
DeleteI'm not sure if I could write romance, but I'm glad my few words intrigued you!
~Susan
17 years is a long time to hold on to another love. Maybe the marriage was due to an unexpected pregnancy? A story worth exploration.
ReplyDeleteHere is mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/
Thank you for stopping by to read, Amanda. I hadn't thought beyond my little story, but that is a good idea!
Delete~Susan
Whooo...Surprising last line. I'm a sucker when it comes to secrets. I want more. Well done. Here's mine:
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Lora. I'm headed to read yours - a little late.
Delete~Susan
Yes, who is Damain and why was the last one postmarked just a week ago? I want to know more! Great post!
ReplyDeleteMy effort is here: http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-friday-fictioneers/
Who is he...yes, that is the great mystery here. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Delete~Susan